Cheetah Posted February 17, 2003 Posted February 17, 2003 I was oddly inspired last night...and this poem is what came out of it. Hope you guys like it...any suggestions for improvement are appreciated! Final Peace ground cold beneath paws fur matted and wet teeth rotted, gums sore but not quite dead Quote
Cheetah Posted February 17, 2003 Author Posted February 17, 2003 Thanks K! :D Good suggestion too, maybe I'll send it to some anti-puppy mill sites! Quote
behle Posted February 17, 2003 Posted February 17, 2003 Cheetah - That's a real "gritty" poem. No sugar coating there! Post it on some sites as K suggested. Keep writing! Quote
Luka-pop Posted February 17, 2003 Posted February 17, 2003 Hehe - I told you it was really good! Like I said in school, I love the choice of words, the image reminds me of Animal Precinct, and the ending is a killer -> "this boy Quote
bk_blue Posted February 18, 2003 Posted February 18, 2003 Excellent poem. Rather chilling... poor dog. :cry: Quote
courtnek Posted February 18, 2003 Posted February 18, 2003 RAW, but GOOD! says alot about the state of some poor pups. I hate to see them in that state, so maybe posting will make a difference. I wish I could adopt them all!! Quote
Ickle Posted February 18, 2003 Posted February 18, 2003 Very sad with more than a hint of truth in it Well done Cheetah have a few tears in my eyes as I post this Ickle Quote
Cheetah Posted February 19, 2003 Author Posted February 19, 2003 Thanks for all the compliments guys! :D I'll definitely try to get this poem up on some sites and i'll ask if I can post it up at my local shelter. Quote
Ickle Posted February 19, 2003 Posted February 19, 2003 Posted this on the international sheltie list and they thought it was great and said sobbed all the way through it Thanks for sharing your feelings in such a direct & honest way Ickle :lol: Quote
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